"FWLS42" - читать интересную книгу автора (A Future We'd Like to See)

trickled over to the newly-formed Disgruntled Postal Workers,
growing stronger even today, on their 10th anniversary..." No,
no. Too informative; no fire! White, white.

"...which brings me to what the media has billed as the
Third Invasion of Cyberspace. The first, the wave of programmers
and educators seeking to use the new VOSNet to encourage
humanity's growth in culture and knowledge. The Second Invasion,
of criminals and traders seeking to make a profit off of the
virtual reality network. Then, the Third Invasion, where the
businesses and media arrived seeking to make a profit off of the
virtual reality network, setting up sanitized systems which
allowed pre-cleaned access for a price..."

Too preachy. Just because I don't like the
commercialization doesn't mean everybody else hates it too.
White white. Need to keep this non-biased.

"...also the sudden appearance and disappearance of the
Thinkers, now only a myth in cyberspace... a race of
hyperintelligent data creatures which could manipulate the net to
their will, bringing themselves into public eye and then
vanishing just as suddenly..."

Speculation. Few people believed they ever existed. White
white white, white.

"...not the only new race to come to light, as the AI
Cyborgs announced that they were indeed walking among us,
numbering in the millions and demanding rights and justice..."

Alright, that's passable. But it's not WORDED right. There
was a lot of fighting and conflict over AI rights, a lot of which
is still going on... this simply didn't grasp it right. White,
white white white, white. White.

"...throughout history, there have been three geniuses in
the field of science. Of course, the great Einstein, a swell guy
despite the fact that he was rather wrong about faster than light
travel..."

Ugh! WHITE!

"...the second genius, the unknown hero who first developed
the VOS software and the AI code, most of which remains
undecipherable today. Many say it was not a single man, but a
group of men..."

Speculation, speculation. Also a myth. White.